一、句子之間缺少過渡性的單詞或詞組

① Salmons swim upstream， they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.

② Salmons swim upstream， and then they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.

二、省字號()的濫用

① the governments plan

② the plan of the government

三、代詞之間的性、數、格不一致

① Everyone has their homework.

② Everyone has his (or her) homework.

四、主句與從句的順序不當

① Some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over， after the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds.

② After the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds， some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over.

五、雙重否定

① Barely no one noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.

② Barely anyone noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.

六、修飾語、插入語的位置不當

① The forest fire， no longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters， jumped the firebreak.

② No longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters， the forest fire jumped the firebreak.

七、意義含糊的先行詞

① The band members collected his and her uniforms.

② The band members collected their uniforms.

八、介詞和冠詞的濫用

① The project of the government reduces the costs of production of the private firms.

② The government project reduces the production costs of private firms.

九、句子缺少成分

① When aiming for the highest returns， and also thinking about the possible losses.

② When aiming for the highest returns， investors also should think about the possible losses.

十、忘記斷句

① I do not recall what kind of printer it was all I remember is that it could sort， staple， and print a packet at the same time.

② I do not recall what kind of printer it was. All I remember is that it could sort， staple， and print a packet at the same time.

一、句子之間缺少過渡性的單詞或詞組

① Salmons swim upstream， they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.

② Salmons swim upstream， and then they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.

二、省字號()的濫用

① the governments plan

② the plan of the government

三、代詞之間的性、數、格不一致

① Everyone has their homework.

② Everyone has his (or her) homework.

四、主句與從句的順序不當

① Some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over， after the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds.

② After the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds， some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over.

五、雙重否定

① Barely no one noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.

② Barely anyone noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.

六、修飾語、插入語的位置不當

① The forest fire， no longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters， jumped the firebreak.

② No longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters， the forest fire jumped the firebreak.

七、意義含糊的先行詞

① The band members collected his and her uniforms.

② The band members collected their uniforms.

八、介詞和冠詞的濫用

① The project of the government reduces the costs of production of the private firms.

② The government project reduces the production costs of private firms.

九、句子缺少成分

① When aiming for the highest returns， and also thinking about the possible losses.

② When aiming for the highest returns， investors also should think about the possible losses.

十、忘記斷句

① I do not recall what kind of printer it was all I remember is that it could sort， staple， and print a packet at the same time.

② I do not recall what kind of printer it was. All I remember is that it could sort， staple， and print a packet at the same time.